a very ambiguous poem
meet me by the water
with feet facing black marble
there is a moonlit path draped for us
remember how we scaled the deep for
treasure etched along an ocean floor
of middle school crush sweet
heart innocence and faith
where dreams once had
no intention to age
but lining every year’s failed love
we learn that these treasures were a myth
so we refuse to near the sea
for the wintered waters
chilled our blood, split
the warmth from our hearts
so that when it rains it pours
and when it stops we burn
yet when she looks at me with her chin on my chest
i am swept with confused alarm
and am crushed by fairytales
of shy toes 20 mph prayers
secret kisses confessions and exhales
we forget our fears tho they
leak through the levies
and step forward
"crushed by fairytales" kickass line.
ReplyDeletesome great imagery and couplets here. "we forget our fears tho they / leak through the levies." sweet stuff.
cuz man, good to see u pursuing the pursuit of something meaningful in all the messes. hope ur doing good. ill b reading.
ReplyDeletelet me have your children
ReplyDeletethumbs up
ReplyDeletejeez i'm usually pretty critical of prose poetry but this was good
ReplyDelete좋다...바다의 해변을 걸으면서 감상을 하고 싶은 기분이 든다... :)
ReplyDeletelol charles!!
ReplyDeletehey anonymous, thanks for the compliment. i really appreciate it! and u know... i think i know how you feel but i think you might be looking in the wrong places. check out some greats like ted hughes... and if ur into korean american poets, check out suji kwock kim. hmm... trying to recommend some people made me just realize that i don't read hardly as much as i probably should. haha... shnap.
ReplyDeleteis the "a very ambiguous poem" meant to be sarcastic?
ReplyDelete"a very ambiguous poem" - if this is a disclaimer, stop hiding behind disclaimers and qualifications; it is sometimes okay to be a sap. who's (was) the girl?
ReplyDeleteif i am reading this incorrectly, i will just say that i will remember the image of a chin on your chest for a long time. and i will wonder what it feels like (to be the chin).
incorrect richard, not to a girl, for said chin belongs to I. I can tell you what my chin felt like...
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